[dreaded_destiny_]

This song has probably been done a million times already but here's my attempt:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.c...;songID=5165784

I recorded this using a fanmade instrumental that I found that came with a male vocal~
I don't know who he is but he sounds great so I sang the female parts...
I hope it turned out okay^^

Comments greatly appreciated!

[hyele128]

you have a pretty voice!
-luckkyy- haha

i wasnt sure who was out of tune but the intonation didnt really match.
there was some pitch problems and if you tweak it alittle bit, then it'll sound awesomme.

[linah]

my comment is that you sound okay...but you can sound alot better if you work on your voice more..you're going kinda fast and it sounds like you're kinda straining because you're going to high...and probraly work more on your vibrato...but i think you'll sound really great but you just need to practice more

[dankyung]

first of all the guy sounds amazing. this is like the first time i heard a guy sing this song THAT well.

so some critiques.i mean overall you have a nice niice tone, but you're using her head voice wayy to muchand ti's kinda frustrating me TT cause this song is very power and all. it also sounds like you're off tune. yea im pretttie sure you're on thr wrong note. cause the harmony with you and the male part doesn't sound right at all. but i think you need to work on your singing a lot more and get this guy to sing with you again, he sounds amazing. in one of the parts like only a few seconds long he sounded like junsu and it really suprised me aha kbut anyways~ i hope i helped~

[tink3rr]

you need to stay in rythm . but your key is right and you sound very nice ~ . just don't rush and stay on beat

[m-wonderland]

it's goodddddddddddddddd.

[dreaded_destiny_]

hyele128:
thank you ^___^ (and yeah... it's probably me that's off, not him XD)

linah:
thanks for your comment, I'll be sure to work hard and practise more!

dankyung:
Yay! An actual critique
LOL, that's exactly what I thought when I first heard him sing.
But I'm not really sure what you mean by "using her head voice"...

Yeah, I think I'm a bit off tone as well and my voice is pretty weak... >___<
I wish I could get this guy to sing with me again but I have no idea who he is...
(The instrumental already had his voice in it, all I did was sing along)
Anyways, thanks for your critique, I'll remember to keep those things in mind next time ^___^

tink3rr:
gah... Timing was always an issue for me... XD
Thank you
I'll try harder next time!

m-wonderland:
thanks for commenting

[dankyung]

^ aha it's no problem. but that's really weird how the instrumental came with his voice O.o LMAO. but wat i meant by "head voice" is that you're not usuing your diaphram it' more using you throat to sing instead of it being in your stomach and diaphram where the power is. try singing this song with your stomach and even if it doesn't sound prettie which i probably won't becuase i mean i do it to and it sounds terrible LMAO but like keep doing that like practice it everyday and one day it'll come and you'll sing this song with power. (: just keep practicing your singing through your diaphram not your throat. aha (:

[dreaded_destiny_]

^ aha it's no problem. but that's really weird how the instrumental came with his voice O.o LMAO. but wat i meant by "head voice" is that you're not usuing your diaphram it' more using you throat to sing instead of it being in your stomach and diaphram where the power is. try singing this song with your stomach and even if it doesn't sound prettie which i probably won't becuase i mean i do it to and it sounds terrible LMAO but like keep doing that like practice it everyday and one day it'll come and you'll sing this song with power. (: just keep practicing your singing through your diaphram not your throat. aha (:

ah, so that's it! (I'm not too familiar with terminology^^; )
I'll remember to practise more because I do tend to use too much throat voice or chest voice sometimes.
One day, I'll get this song right!! XD
Thanks again <3

[YELL;OH]

yo, send me the instrumental with this guys voice! xP

regarding you:
you`re not on pitch when you are singing with the guy.
pronunciation is a bit off, but that can be easily fixed~
this is a very powerful song [well, at least the xiah/jri version], you need to support your sound.

[dreaded_destiny_]

yo, send me the instrumental with this guys voice! xP

regarding you:
you`re not on pitch when you are singing with the guy.
pronunciation is a bit off, but that can be easily fixed~
this is a very powerful song [well, at least the xiah/jri version], you need to support your sound.

sure^^
check your PM XD

I did think I had some errors in pronounciation, I guess I have to listen to the song a few more times~
do you think you can tell me specifically what was the problem with the pronouciation?
is it the intonation, or emphasis, or just down-right wrong?
sorry, I'm not Korean so I really don't know if I'm sinnging it wrong sometimes

anways, thank you for your comment, I'll try to sing with more power next time ^___^

[iyagi]

I think your voice is kinda like YUI's, you're using too much breath on a short note. So then you can't really hold out a long note very well. I think with some more practice and such, you'll sound a lot better. just let the music and words flow in your voice. but you're off to a good start. Good luck~ Hope that wasn't a confusing explanation ^^;

[dreaded_destiny_]

I think your voice is kinda like YUI's, you're using too much breath on a short note. So then you can't really hold out a long note very well. I think with some more practice and such, you'll sound a lot better. just let the music and words flow in your voice. but you're off to a good start. Good luck~ Hope that wasn't a confusing explanation ^^;

Really? Thank you XD
Yeah, I really need to work on my breath control because I tend to do that a lot
Don't worry, it wasn't confusing and thank you for the comment!
I'll keep those things in mind when I'm practising ^___^

[iyagi]

^ Haha, no problem ^^ well I tried to look for an example in your singing... like when you sing "apeul ppunini", i hear "hapeul" instead because the breath is too strong there. so, yah, hope that helps. Timeless can be a very difficult song to sing >< but its good to challenge yourself~

[lovablekrnstar63]

okay.
the harmony clashes
very badly
b/c the guy has a deep, rich voice (i am LOVING it..doesnt compare to my junsu though)

and you:
1) you can't support your voice. it's so airy. baby girl, learn to sing through your diaghram
2) you can't stay on rhythm (i don't know if that's the mixing .. ) & pitches
3) you can't connect the notes.
like..do you know what i'm talking about? like.. umm...you go from one pitch to the other by cutting off one note & jumping to the other. when it's supposed to be a fluid transition.. do you get what i mean?
4) work on your korean

i would like to see you practice more & post up more songs
(and preferably timeless. it's been done a million + one times. ..even though i was one of them, haha)

[dreaded_destiny_]

okay.
the harmony clashes
very badly
b/c the guy has a deep, rich voice (i am LOVING it..doesnt compare to my junsu though)

and you:
1) you can't support your voice. it's so airy. baby girl, learn to sing through your diaghram
2) you can't stay on rhythm (i don't know if that's the mixing .. ) & pitches
3) you can't connect the notes.
like..do you know what i'm talking about? like.. umm...you go from one pitch to the other by cutting off one note & jumping to the other. when it's supposed to be a fluid transition.. do you get what i mean?
4) work on your korean

i would like to see you practice more & post up more songs
(and preferably timeless. it's been done a million + one times. ..even though i was one of them, haha)

wow, thank you for your critique^^
I love that guy's voice too and I know I have to work hard really hard to match up to it~

1) I know, my voice can be very airy because I can't breathe properly (baby girl?? LOL)
I really have to practise singing with my diaphram more because I use my throat too much.

2) the rhythm problems are due to my crapppy mixing XD (but I am a bit off at times)

3) I know what you mean by connecting notes, I know it's horrible but I tend to do that when I'm having difficulty with the transition >___<

4) yeah, I need to work on my korean a LOT because I'm quite new to the fandom and I'm not too used to the romanization...

but thank you for the critique, I'll work hard and practise more and hopefully I'll be able to sing properly one day!
I'll probably give Timeless another shot once I've solved my singing problems^^ (oo.. you sang it too?)
In the mean time I'll find more songs to practise with ^___^

[lovablekrnstar63]

oh yea..
sorry about the "baby girl" part.
i talk like that at random times.
it'd be really cool if you sang the same song again to see how much you improved =]

and at the end, i ment to say "preferably NOT timeless" but the "NOT" was not put in there.. i dont know why.

yes, i did sing timeless
(but i dont think you'll find a girl who HASNT sang timeless on soompi, haha)
but i didnt sing it that well
if you wanna listen to me sing,
i posted up a new thread
(it's the one w/ alicia keys & christmas song)

=]

[KuYA II]

yeah like what others said, just try to work on your vocal and harmonizing with the guy good job though!! just keep practicing and you'll do awsome!!

btw, do you still have that song timeless with the guy only singing? if you do can you send it to me please and thank you ^^

[dreaded_destiny_]

oh yea..
sorry about the "baby girl" part.
i talk like that at random times.
it'd be really cool if you sang the same song again to see how much you improved =]

and at the end, i ment to say "preferably NOT timeless" but the "NOT" was not put in there.. i dont know why.

yes, i did sing timeless
(but i dont think you'll find a girl who HASNT sang timeless on soompi, haha)
but i didnt sing it that well
if you wanna listen to me sing,
i posted up a new thread
(it's the one w/ alicia keys & christmas song)

=]

XD that's okay^^
ooo... I'll go check out your song~

yeah like what others said, just try to work on your vocal and harmonizing with the guy good job though!! just keep practicing and you'll do awsome!!

btw, do you still have that song timeless with the guy only singing? if you do can you send it to me please and thank you ^^

yeah... my harmonizing was crap >___<
but thanks for commenting^^

yup, I still have it!
I'll send it to you via PM