[x`ind]

well this is my first time writing anything like this,( for AP english) and it may seem a little cliche as it focuses on existentialist ideas v. religion but i just threw this together for a film that is due on friday haha so i don't have much time. well please read this outline and leave me some feedback :]



The story of a young woman, who remains unnamed has been admitted to existential therapy for her inability to cope with her impending death from losing her battle to lymphangioleiomyomatosis (LAM), a rare and fatal lung disease. She struggles with the confliction between her Christian beliefs and that of her existential therapist, Dr. Antipode.

The first scene begins with the woman leaning against a balcony talking to herself about why she should even go on with these last few days and feeling betrayed by all she has known and the faith she has put in her religion. She then continues by fixing herself up with gaudy amounts of makeup and cleans her tidy overdone home. She puts too much effort in preservation.

There are numerous flashbacks throughout the feature, which don’t seem to make much sense at first or even be in any sort of sequential order. The flashbacks are usually in bright yellow light reflecting warmth and safety that contradicts with the monotonous use of the present day.

Much of the film is of the woman alone reflecting the idea that we are alone in our journey of life. The woman’s roommate, Bumbles who seems to have a strange relationship with her, showing that he cares about her by requiring her to go through therapy to realize that life is inevitably going to end, does not live by these ideals himself. Bumbles seems to be the authoritarian figure in her life that she clings to though he is an emotional mess, a contradiction in every aspect.

Scenes in church are also crucial as she spends each day listening to the preaching of her pastor to then go to her therapy sessions, which directly conflict themselves. Dr. Antipode reminds her of death each and everyday. He even has a clock, which states each tick is a tick closer to the end!

Soon the feature becomes extremely chaotic as all the elements in her life are thrown together seemingly at full speed and impossible to decipher. The voices of the preacher are heard from the mouth of her roommate and faces warped, objects misplaced.

Finally it is revealed that the woman has never had the illness and she had been put into the test of terror management theory as a few low-income citizens chosen by the government to motivate her into living a more productive life. However as the woman has produced a screen play, she can no longer find anyone to show it to.

[dohee]

i'm sure what you have in your head is more complex and detailed than what you wrote here..
but for some reason i feel like its TOO complex which makes it kind of cliche?
like i feel like ure trying to jam like every "twist" of a somewhat original movie into one production...
like the very last part.. the surprise ending seems COMPLETELY random to me.. and maybe thats ur intent but its kind of like.. "huh?"
if you're going to have trace elements of the ending throughout the story maybe it'd make more sense.. but i feel like ure trying to surprise the audience so much that the story loses focus and meaning?
my ap english teacher always asked.. whats the purpose of this piece? whats the message? and maybe there isnt ONE clear message but i feel like what u have written down is just.. segments of films i've already seen without some sort of cohesion..
anwyways.. thats how i feel.. it sounds unique but maybe.. not fresh or entertaining..
good luck. sorry for the criticism but since you're being graded on it just feltlike giving you my honest opinion :]