[bands182]

ha so i dont think it was a good idea..
since, eventhough this is a great song, i dont actually know it so well...which would explain why i may go off melody......

ive also been ill and have this annoying cough [for some reason whenever i get coughs, they dont go away for 6 months.....T_T] so im sorry for the croakiness at some places....

other than that, id appreciate the feedback and advice for me to improve

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[imperial13]

lalala first, back in a second

good, but short things, i guess, that you could work on - pitch. it seems a bit flat at times. phrasing sounds a bit awkward. high notes are nice and a bit more power i guess, you seem a bit breathy.

[ritzy!]

you sound young and drunk haha like a bit slurring..
need more support on the higher notes and in the chorus as well
on the other hand, i really like your tone~

[amys_melody]

The music is going fast right? Like, is this really your voice? I'm not going crazy right? Because I'm so confused but anyway, it sounds really cute though.

[MangoJuice]

When I read that you were sick, I was expecting you to be horrible. Sorry. I wasn't gonna comment, but what the hell. It was alright actually. I think you can improve so much and be really good. It seems like when you're singing you don't really have confidence in your voice so it sounds weaker than what I think you can do. So just be more confident and take hold of your notes. Also, work on your style like vibrato, falsetto, r&b or whatever genre your voice best fits in so that you can sound more distinct among the rest!

Well, peace easy, lady.

[bands182]

lalala first, back in a second

good, but short things, i guess, that you could work on - pitch. it seems a bit flat at times. phrasing sounds a bit awkward. high notes are nice and a bit more power i guess, you seem a bit breathy.

youre rather quick with my posts as of recent xD *gives oppa cool points*

haaaaaa you know im so clueless on this sort of thing that i have no idea how to work on pitch...the only thing is that my friend once told me to smile so it lifts up my layrnx or something so that i dont sound flat?
i strain on high notes x_X orteke~

hahah sorry, im even more breathy cos im always holding back a cough xD haha
*coughing fit*
wait another 5 months and my cough will be gone again and i can breathe normally again...
*glares at own throat/whatever causes coughs*
thanks for commenting xx

[ImperfectionEmbodied]

I'm doing fine, thank you XD My demo is like, a 1/4 of the way done so I'm excited.

Okay, on to your clip.

You are still a bit breathy when you sing, but generally and overall, you've improved on singing with "power," and supporting your vocals. Still, when you're singing the high notes, you revert back to singing from your throat, and you know you've gotta watch out for that lest you want to strain your throat (and it won't sound as good as it could be).

Your note shifts are still not smooth. Like...when you sing "...no air," or "there," or "breathe" near the end. The transition from the higher note to the lower note is not a smooth one, and you're kind of letting a breath out when you sing it. It could just be stylistic, but even so, if you do it like that, you must make it apparent that it's supposed to be like that. If you're having problems transitioning, just do slides for warm-up. It doesn't even have to sound pretty, but make sure all your notes are legato and sound something like those old, "pull whistle" kind of things?

Also about note shifts, this doesn't apply to all cases, but for this song, in the words such as "air," the notes do have the same dynamic value. The higher note and the lower note should be the same "volume." I had the same problem, too, and my teacher had to tell me repetitively to "give attention to both notes." All notes are important, so don't give one more love than the other, okay? XD

Anyway, that's all I've got for this clip. I'm sorry if I missed something, it's still early morning X__x Anyway, whenever you need me or just want to talk, don't hesitate! XD

[bands182]

you sound young and drunk haha like a bit slurring..
need more support on the higher notes and in the chorus as well
on the other hand, i really like your tone~

hahah your comment made me laugh xD
but thats quite a good way of saying it =p
thanks for listening x

[bands182]

The music is going fast right? Like, is this really your voice? I'm not going crazy right? Because I'm so confused but anyway, it sounds really cute though.

hmmm?
ermm i didnt think i was going that high....are you sure youre playing it on the right....format? hah
i not sure, but one time my friend thought i was a chipmunk but it was just soundclick playing it hi-fi and messing up the sound...=s

[CtlunatC]

i can tell you're sick because you're abit nasally at some parts. but the chorus was good with the high notes, very nice XD.

you were a bit flat at the beginning though. GET WELL SOON~!

[hunterheart]

o__O my 10 yr old sister sings it better...
It sounded so broken off and emotionless. Your have a nice voice though.

[yennerz]

You seem to be rushing. Take your time, enunciate the words!
You're a little off key.

Practice makes perfect after all! Other than that, pretty good! Keep working on it!

[amys_melody]

hmmm?
ermm i didnt think i was going that high....are you sure youre playing it on the right....format? hah
i not sure, but one time my friend thought i was a chipmunk but it was just soundclick playing it hi-fi and messing up the sound...=s

oooh, you're right! lol I tried it in lo-fi and it sounds normal now ahah. Well I think you did pretty well, except on the high notes I think instead of just making your voice higher, you should make it stronger too, like louder. Anyway I hope you understand what I'm talking about I don't really have a way with words-_-

[bands182]

When I read that you were sick, I was expecting you to be horrible. Sorry. I wasn't gonna comment, but what the hell. It was alright actually. I think you can improve so much and be really good. It seems like when you're singing you don't really have confidence in your voice so it sounds weaker than what I think you can do. So just be more confident and take hold of your notes. Also, work on your style like vibrato, falsetto, r&b or whatever genre your voice best fits in so that you can sound more distinct among the rest!

Well, peace easy, lady.

haha thanks for listening and commenting!
hmm im hating my voice atm...its still in bad condition..
thanks for the advice, il keep practicing!

[bands182]

I'm doing fine, thank you XD My demo is like, a 1/4 of the way done so I'm excited.

Okay, on to your clip.

You are still a bit breathy when you sing, but generally and overall, you've improved on singing with "power," and supporting your vocals. Still, when you're singing the high notes, you revert back to singing from your throat, and you know you've gotta watch out for that lest you want to strain your throat (and it won't sound as good as it could be).

Your note shifts are still not smooth. Like...when you sing "...no air," or "there," or "breathe" near the end. The transition from the higher note to the lower note is not a smooth one, and you're kind of letting a breath out when you sing it. It could just be stylistic, but even so, if you do it like that, you must make it apparent that it's supposed to be like that. If you're having problems transitioning, just do slides for warm-up. It doesn't even have to sound pretty, but make sure all your notes are legato and sound something like those old, "pull whistle" kind of things?

Also about note shifts, this doesn't apply to all cases, but for this song, in the words such as "air," the notes do have the same dynamic value. The higher note and the lower note should be the same "volume." I had the same problem, too, and my teacher had to tell me repetitively to "give attention to both notes." All notes are important, so don't give one more love than the other, okay? XD

Anyway, that's all I've got for this clip. I'm sorry if I missed something, it's still early morning X__x Anyway, whenever you need me or just want to talk, don't hesitate! XD

Thanks for the amazing advice unnie <3
im finding it quite hard >.< especially with my throat atm "
<3 ly

[bands182]

i can tell you're sick because you're abit nasally at some parts. but the chorus was good with the high notes, very nice XD.

you were a bit flat at the beginning though. GET WELL SOON~!

im getting sick of being sick.....im no longer as natrually nasally...i dont have much of a blocked nose now....but my cough hasnt gone away and has gotten worse!!! 0_0
orteke~

thanks for stopping by luna

[nkp0504]

that was good but you need more emotion yea there were some minor pitch problems
but it was fine

i think you should duet with another guy since it is a duet song
maybe then you can actually put some more emotion in to it

good job!

[bands182]

o__O my 10 yr old sister sings it better...
It sounded so broken off and emotionless. Your have a nice voice though.

hahah oh dear....my singing is quite terrible atm xD apologies~
i need to work on my emotions -___-"
but thank you for listening anyway!