hi, youre new here?
not bad for a debut.
youve got a nice voice but you need to add some techniques and emotion into it.
THe way youre staring into the camera is sorta awkward...feel the lyrics and sing as if youre singing to someone special.
work on lengthening your notes, and facial expressions

[picture those singers on stage....they close their eyes, tear up etc]
itll be a great improvement.
good luck!
fighting!
Ali xx