[lilchineseboy]

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[gfoo1]

hey whats up man? im always interested in checking out ppl with original lyrics, so i figured id give ya a listen. truthfully, i ain't a fan at all of the autotune, so i won't comment on that haha..what i can comment is on your flow and delivery. flow for the most part seemed okay, though it seemed a bit bland..id suggest you switch up like in terms of rhythm and what not to keep ppl interested. as for your delivery, the delivery during the autotune parts seemed more energetic..but during your verses, it was kinda monotone and somewhat robotic to me. to be honest, the way you delivered your verses weren't that convincing..you really want to make your listeners feel like you really mean what you say (regardless of whether you mean it or not), so add more emotion and what not. i dono how long you've been spitting but the more you practice the more your verses will sound natural..anyways hope that helps a bit. keep working @ it!

btw. check out my "Nobody Remix" (thread in sig)..i also rap too, so id be interested in hearing another mc's 2cents.

[lilchineseboy]

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[Soul Jynx]

well that's cool ,but you need to be more "mean" on it if you know what i mean. hehe!

[CHOMP!]

this is pretty good (:
your singing part is cutee hahaa

however, you sound a little bored when you're rapping
and work on flow some more
and i really really don't like the "hey hey heyyyy" at the beginning :x

but nice job



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edit: i really like your finished project up on your soundclick